Come Everybody! Join our party!
How would you celebrate your kid’s birthday this year?
To have a wonderful and unforgettable celebration, we can provide a fun place with kid’s most favourite menu and exciting games.
You can also get a FREE birthday gift and birthday cake!!!!!
Don’t miss the chance! Dial to Wonderland immediately, your kids must get more than they expected!!!!
Adam's corrections. Change the words in red. Hints in green.
Come Everybody! Join our party! How would you celebrate your kid’s birthday this year? To have (Change to one word, F___) a wonderful and unforgettable celebration, we can provide a fun place with kid’s most favourite menu and exciting games. You can also get a FREE birthday gift and birthday cake!!!!! Don’t miss the chance! Dial to ( C___ )Wonderland immediately, a____ your kids must get more than they expected!!!!
Monday, September 25, 2006
Educating TV Games
Have you planned to buy a birthday gift for your kid? It is troublesome for people to think about it. But we absolutely can solve the problem for you. Don’t wait for someone else to do it for you. Let’s us do the chore for you!
Visit our shop and choose one of the marvellous Educating TV game. Thought playing, your kid will learn more English vocabularies and idioms. Your kid must love it! I dare.
What are you waiting for? Visit our shop with your kid now!
Learning with fun, it’s what we have done!
Adam's corrections. Change words in red. Hints in green.
Have you planned to buy a birthday gift for your kid? It is troublesome for people to think about it. But we absolutely can solve the problem for you. Don’t wait for someone else to do it for you. Let’s us do the chore for you! Visit our shop and choose one of the (change to a personal pronoun) marvellous Educating TV game. Thought (wrong word/ spelling) playing, your kid will learn more English vocabularies (usually single) and idioms. Your kid must love it! I dare(??). What are you waiting for? Visit our shop with your kid now! Learning with fun, it’s what we have done!
Visit our shop and choose one of the marvellous Educating TV game. Thought playing, your kid will learn more English vocabularies and idioms. Your kid must love it! I dare.
What are you waiting for? Visit our shop with your kid now!
Learning with fun, it’s what we have done!
Adam's corrections. Change words in red. Hints in green.
Have you planned to buy a birthday gift for your kid? It is troublesome for people to think about it. But we absolutely can solve the problem for you. Don’t wait for someone else to do it for you. Let’s us do the chore for you! Visit our shop and choose one of the (change to a personal pronoun) marvellous Educating TV game. Thought (wrong word/ spelling) playing, your kid will learn more English vocabularies (usually single) and idioms. Your kid must love it! I dare(??). What are you waiting for? Visit our shop with your kid now! Learning with fun, it’s what we have done!
Advertising Music Pad
Do you feel boring after a whole day of work? It is common to relax by listening to music. Have you consider making your own music mixture? Dancing on your feet, and creating the perfect match! By Stepping on our “Music Pad” you will enjoy the creation and fitness of your body.
Adam's corrections. Change words in red. Hints in green.
Do you feel boring after a whole day of (replace with one word) work? It is common to relax by listening to music. Have you consider (tense) making your own music mixture? Dancing on your feet, and creating the perfect match! By Stepping on our “Music Pad” you will enjoy the creation and fitness of your body.
Adam's corrections. Change words in red. Hints in green.
Do you feel boring after a whole day of (replace with one word) work? It is common to relax by listening to music. Have you consider (tense) making your own music mixture? Dancing on your feet, and creating the perfect match! By Stepping on our “Music Pad” you will enjoy the creation and fitness of your body.
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Adam's corrections. Change words in red. Hints in green.
Have you ever heard that eating an apple a day will keep the doctor away? Have you ever heard that drinking apple juice can make your body slimmer and look younger? Do you think an apple juice with low calories and sodium, but no fat, with 120% Vitamin C, could (tense) be bought from your nearest supermarket at only $10- per 2Ls? It is true! What are you waiting for? Buy two bottles ABC Slim Apple Juice can (conjunction)get one tea tumbler free!
Adam's corrections. Change words in red. Hints in green.
Have you ever heard that eating an apple a day will keep the doctor away? Have you ever heard that drinking apple juice can make your body slimmer and look younger? Do you think an apple juice with low calories and sodium, but no fat, with 120% Vitamin C, could (tense) be bought from your nearest supermarket at only $10- per 2Ls? It is true! What are you waiting for? Buy two bottles ABC Slim Apple Juice can (conjunction)get one tea tumbler free!
Lession 4 - Advertisement Slogan
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Working like a tortoise??
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– Notebook is designed to streamline briefcase outlook
Mobility
– Dual Core CPU is installed and the notebook is powered with built-in Wi-Fi and ready for connection to wireless LAN
Innovation
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Adam's corrections. Change words in red. Hints in green.
New Generation of Portable Computer – SMILE series
Still bringing along your stone-likes and old-fashioned notebook?
Working like a tortoise??
Slim – Notebook is designed to (conjunction and artcle needed.) streamline briefcase outlook
Mobility – Dual Core CPU is installed and the notebook is powered with built-in Wi-Fi and ___ (verb) ready for connection to wireless LAN
Innovation – Creative ergonomic keyboard design will make your work finishing (word form) quickly and more comfortable
Long battery life – Extended lithium battery can be last for over 15 hours ____ (preposition) continuous operation
Entertainment – Built-in 3D graphic technology gives you enjoying (adjective form needed) 3D games world at any times (one word). Buy it NOW for ___ Special Offer!!!
Still bringing along your stone-likes and old-fashioned notebook?
Working like a tortoise??
Slim
– Notebook is designed to streamline briefcase outlook
Mobility
– Dual Core CPU is installed and the notebook is powered with built-in Wi-Fi and ready for connection to wireless LAN
Innovation
– Creative ergonomic keyboard design will make your work finishing quickly and more comfortable
Long battery life
– Extended lithium battery can be last for over 15 hours continuous operation
Entertainment
– Built-in 3D graphic technology gives you enjoying 3D games world at any times.
Buy it NOW for Special Offer!!!
Adam's corrections. Change words in red. Hints in green.
New Generation of Portable Computer – SMILE series
Still bringing along your stone-likes and old-fashioned notebook?
Working like a tortoise??
Slim – Notebook is designed to (conjunction and artcle needed.) streamline briefcase outlook
Mobility – Dual Core CPU is installed and the notebook is powered with built-in Wi-Fi and ___ (verb) ready for connection to wireless LAN
Innovation – Creative ergonomic keyboard design will make your work finishing (word form) quickly and more comfortable
Long battery life – Extended lithium battery can be last for over 15 hours ____ (preposition) continuous operation
Entertainment – Built-in 3D graphic technology gives you enjoying (adjective form needed) 3D games world at any times (one word). Buy it NOW for ___ Special Offer!!!
Instant noodles
If you are going to have meeting within several minutes and you feel extremely hungry, what do you want to eat? Something tastes delicious and healthy as it is low fat and low sodium. There are many flavours such as curry, seafood, beef, chicken and spicy, for you to choose. It is convenient for you to buy anywhere. Don’t miss it! Try the ABC instant noodles now!!
Adam's corrections. Change words in red. Hints in green.
If you are going to have ___ meeting within several minutes (replace with one word) and you feel extremely hungry, what do you want to eat? Something ____ tastes delicious and healthy as it is low fat and low sodium? There are many flavours such as curry, seafood, beef, chicken and spicy, for you to choose ____ (preposition needed). It is convenient for you to buy anywhere. Don’t miss it! Try the ABC instant noodles now!!
Adam's corrections. Change words in red. Hints in green.
If you are going to have ___ meeting within several minutes (replace with one word) and you feel extremely hungry, what do you want to eat? Something ____ tastes delicious and healthy as it is low fat and low sodium? There are many flavours such as curry, seafood, beef, chicken and spicy, for you to choose ____ (preposition needed). It is convenient for you to buy anywhere. Don’t miss it! Try the ABC instant noodles now!!
Re: Directions to the Ferry Pier
Hi Patricia
Here are your directions with corrections in red.
Here are the directions for how to go to the ferry terminal from Tsim Sha Tsui MTR Station. Take exit C1 and go up to the street level. At the exit go straight, past two blocks. At the end of the road, turn right. At the end of this block, you will see a subway for crossing the road. Go down into the subway and then go up at the end of it to the other side of the road. At the street level, turn left and go straight. Make sure that you are going in the same direction as you were before crossing the road. After two zebra crossings and another two blocks, you will find the ferry terminal on your left hand side.
Here are your directions with corrections in red.
Here are the directions for how to go to the ferry terminal from Tsim Sha Tsui MTR Station. Take exit C1 and go up to the street level. At the exit go straight, past two blocks. At the end of the road, turn right. At the end of this block, you will see a subway for crossing the road. Go down into the subway and then go up at the end of it to the other side of the road. At the street level, turn left and go straight. Make sure that you are going in the same direction as you were before crossing the road. After two zebra crossings and another two blocks, you will find the ferry terminal on your left hand side.
Sunday, September 24, 2006
Direction to ferry terminal
Here are the directions for how to go to the ferry terminal from Tsim Sha Tsui MRT Station. Take the exit C1 and go up to the street level. At the exit go straight across two blocks. At the end of the road, turn right. At the end of the block, you will see a subway for crossing the road. Go down to the subway and and go up at the end of it to the other side of the road. At the street level, turn left and go straight. Make sure that you are going on the same direction as before crossing the road. After two zebra crossings another two blocks, you will find the ferry terminal at your left hand side.
Monday, September 18, 2006
Directions
Here is the example of giving directions that we did in class.
Here are the directions for how to get to my office. It’s quite complicated but you should be ok! First catch the MTR to Tsim Sha Tsui. Don’t take the first exit from the station; instead stay in the subway until exit H8 and then go up to the street level. At the exit turn right and then take the first left. You will see an alley between two buildings. Walk down that until the end. At the end you will get to a lane where there are often illegally parked cars blocking the narrow road. You might see a traffic warden there! Next you will come out on to a main road which you have to cross over. There is a zebra crossing, but the pedestrian traffic lights are very slow, so it is probably quicker to go up over the footbridge. Rather than going down on the other side, you might as well stay on the walkway as it is more convenient than going down to the pavement again. Continue on it until you get to my building which it enters on the first floor. Take the lift to the sixth floor. My office is on the left when you come out of the lift.
Write your own directions in a new post.
Here are the directions for how to get to my office. It’s quite complicated but you should be ok! First catch the MTR to Tsim Sha Tsui. Don’t take the first exit from the station; instead stay in the subway until exit H8 and then go up to the street level. At the exit turn right and then take the first left. You will see an alley between two buildings. Walk down that until the end. At the end you will get to a lane where there are often illegally parked cars blocking the narrow road. You might see a traffic warden there! Next you will come out on to a main road which you have to cross over. There is a zebra crossing, but the pedestrian traffic lights are very slow, so it is probably quicker to go up over the footbridge. Rather than going down on the other side, you might as well stay on the walkway as it is more convenient than going down to the pavement again. Continue on it until you get to my building which it enters on the first floor. Take the lift to the sixth floor. My office is on the left when you come out of the lift.
Write your own directions in a new post.
Welcome to the Writing at Work Level 6 Blog
Dear Writing at Work level 6 Students
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The purpose of the blog is to give you greater opportunities to practise your English, and also create a semi permanent place for your English writing.
There are several ways that you can use the blog.
I have created this blog for this class.
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